Saturday, 18 February 2012

Fire Dance by Tania Redd - February Femmes Fatales

She's hot, she's not what you expect her to be - for who is?

Tania Redd's second February Femmes Fatales piece packs a powerful, breathless punch. Goth, pagan - traditional - I am LOVING  the image Fire Dance throws at us, its shadow burning...

FIRE DANCE

Dimona looks wicked tonight; the long black bridal gown hugging every curve.

“Your hour will come” she smugly reassures.

I give a crooked knowing smile; follow her through the undergrowth cursing under my breath. Her betrothed is waiting; he’s unable to meet my eyes. He leads her into the nine foot wreath lined circle.

Facing each other, their hands are tied together with cord, a broomstick at their feet as the ceremony gets underway. My role is to sweep the circle with the broomstick, dance around the happy couple. I rehearsed earlier to ensure everything goes to plan, and add a little sizzle to the nuptials. Snatching up the fire torch, I advance swiftly, an ancient flame thrower shrieking in delight, as the petrol sodden broomstick flares up, engulfing the traitess and her quarry in flames, the circle collapsing into a burning pit.

My hour has come.

_________ The End _________

Bio: Tania Redd enjoys writing black comedy, horror and crime fiction in the form of short film scripts. She is currently redrafting her first novel and working on a radio play.

8 comments:

  1. there's - impact and then there's IMPACT!
    wow and double wow, Tania, I am knocked out with this! So precise and so very very cold, despite the fire!

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  2. Swept off feet ~ fired up ~ hot nuptials ~ come on baby light my fire . . . Tania's tell goes clever past cliched traditions.

    ~ Absolutely*Kate

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  3. I was able to see and feel the night through your writing. The story bubbled and then erupted into a wonderful end/beginning. I hope there are more stories about your powerful heroine.

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  4. Ooh, love the narrator's skulking subterfuge! That sure did add sizzle to the day's reading, Tania, as does your skillful way with words. Sounds as though you're pretty handy with a broomstick, too. Fabulous.

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  5. Short but adeptly dark. I didn't see that end coming, either!

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  6. Ouch, revenge served hot. Short and sweet.

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  7. Short but so packed with action. Wonderful example that less is more.

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  8. A blazing tale! I agree, less is more. Fantastic flash, Tania.

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