tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post5537565985707456306..comments2023-12-31T16:30:56.708+00:00Comments on Lily Childs' Feardom: Lily's Friday PredictionLily Childshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15861288507716873813noreply@blogger.comBlogger63125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-56274128390391828992011-03-24T21:04:21.215+00:002011-03-24T21:04:21.215+00:00Asuqi, Winter Hunt is a careful glimpse into a del...<strong>Asuqi</strong>, <em>Winter Hunt</em> is a careful glimpse into a delicate relationship, the fox as harbinger. Sad and beautiful.<br />Fox-man thinks himself a sexy beast in <em>Obtainable</em>; the (presumably) non-skinny, non-blond wants him for her own reasons. Intriguing.<br /><br /><strong>Anthony</strong>, marvellously strange and poetic with the most exquisite title - and last line. I feel every form of wetness here, healing and harming.<br /><br /><strong>Rebecca</strong>, when I first read this the narrator was a man. I think LaFayette was flurrying in my periphery. I love this; it's lush and luscious, filthy and matter-of-fact with a killer last line.<br /><br /><strong>John</strong>, Madame Fox is such an extraordinary character. Torn, split, shared - the duality of folklore and mysticism. This is a beautifully visceral and heart-rending read.<br /><br /><strong>Steve</strong>, welcome in. Fabulous pace here; I am chugging with the breathlessness - but am I right to be afraid at what Grandpa is doing to her? Intriguing.<br /><br /><strong>Melenka</strong>, wow, this is delicious. I love the reference to thrashing about - suggesting obvliousness. Gorgous sense of shifting by will here; I don't want to flog my own writing but this reminds me of my <a href="http://newfleshmagazine.blogspot.com/2010/09/swivel.html" rel="nofollow">Dressing Up Box</a> demon.<br /><br /><strong>Chris</strong>, welcome to my world! Have you been hovering this week? Ha ha, very tongue in cheek but I reckon this would win you money in one of the popular magazines.<br /><br /><strong>Sandra</strong>, I know what you mean! The Prediction challenge has grown so much (I'm glad to say) that it's difficult to keep up. But I for one am so grateful to those who submit pieces let alone comment - so come as you are, as the great man said.<br /><br />On that note, the Prediction is now closed for this week. Back in a while with results - though how, I really don't know!Lily Childshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15861288507716873813noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-44585876683524209222011-03-24T20:59:54.815+00:002011-03-24T20:59:54.815+00:00Chris - It may be "cheap," but it's ...<b>Chris</b> - It may be "cheap," but it's wicked fun.<br /><br /><b>Sandra</b> - I write my comments in a separate window, so I don't have to scroll up and down. Then, when I'm done, I cut and paste them. I find that makes it easier to keep track and ensures sure I don't miss anyone's stories.Melenkahttp://pushcomestoshove.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-22985250897536195352011-03-24T18:17:47.956+00:002011-03-24T18:17:47.956+00:00John: I love the black/white dichotomy and the hop...<strong>John</strong>: I love the black/white dichotomy and the hope that white brings. Great images!<br /><br /><strong>Steve</strong>: my first thought was she was keeping grandpa from the train, but as I read the understanding and _horror_ dawns.<br /><br /><strong>Melenka</strong>: <i>Crashing</i>, I love the way you capture club-dance. Lovely voice "so she will be". I'm intrigued by this character, unfortunately I think it could corrupt me too.<br /><br /><strong>Chris</strong>: <i>Tech</i>, cute play on words; like the way you capture the different modern day equivalents and the clever way they play on his frustrations.AidanFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09876041003278004627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-26687431826194448272011-03-24T15:53:50.647+00:002011-03-24T15:53:50.647+00:00Steve - I like the structured feel, there's a ...Steve - I like the structured feel, there's a great sense of pistons and mechanism that belies the human tragedy at the end. Good stuff.<br /><br />Melenka - I'm always impressed when people manage to serialise these and fit the three words in, like William did last week. Great final line, too.<br /><br />Chris - Funny, and very rapid fire comedy too. =)John Xerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17492709629314280633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-21782319399837226712011-03-24T15:21:57.375+00:002011-03-24T15:21:57.375+00:00I apologise for not commenting on these - apart fr...I apologise for not commenting on these - apart from the gob-smacked awe with which I read them I cannot fathom how on earth to do it - this little box gives me claustrophobia and whizzing back and forth makes me seasick. Any advice will be truly gratefully received.<br />And YOUR comments on my piece are heart-warming, thank you.Sandra Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-49307105639990438092011-03-24T11:31:48.330+00:002011-03-24T11:31:48.330+00:00Yes, Antonia, I agree! My writing improves and als...Yes, Antonia, I agree! My writing improves and also, I´m having so much fun =)<br /><br />Lovely comments -- thanks people!<br /><br />60 comments -- heee! Good luck, Lily darling ;)asuqihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05478950013985706858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-29552656484146289282011-03-24T11:24:10.415+00:002011-03-24T11:24:10.415+00:00John – such a strong piece! I like the relentlessn...John – such a strong piece! I like the relentlessness about her change. Powerful imagery.<br /><br />Steve – I like this a lot. There´s a wildness to your writing that´s very appealing. Fresh!<br /><br />Melenka – dark and delicious! Loved the last line and this: “I tender the sort of smile she never expected from someone wearing this skin.” Great!<br /><br />Chris – LOL! Brilliant and clever!asuqihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05478950013985706858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-89258721986743679442011-03-23T11:56:25.640+00:002011-03-23T11:56:25.640+00:00Steve, what a lovely precise piece of writing! Sh...Steve, what a lovely precise piece of writing! Shock horror ending perfectly expressed -no pun intended!<br />John, loved it<br />Melenka, yes, it had to come out again, didn't it? and another superb last line!<br />Chris, loved the poem ...<br />not sure if anyone else is finding this but I feel my writing has got better from taking part in these regular challenges, where the word count matters and you have to pare the piece down to fit. Tighter writing is often better writing.<br />So, thanks, Lily, for the enjoyment and the challenge!Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12594229396805493611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-48212097901751476412011-03-23T10:18:49.010+00:002011-03-23T10:18:49.010+00:00Wow, so many stories this week.
Jenny- I like the...Wow, so many stories this week.<br /><br />Jenny- I like the symbolism in this piece, a great opening line that grabs from the outset.<br /><br />Mimi- there is something cold and calculating about this story which makes it all the more effective<br /><br />Ellie- I like the divisive nature in this; humanity versus alien, and I’m looking forward to part 3.<br /><br />Susan- here you’ve eloquently captured a standoff between animal and man through expression alone, which comes through so strongly.<br /><br />Lily - ‘Her Grace’- I really like the way you turn it on its head.‘Lady Fox snickers – licks her cubs in the sunlight’ is so symbolic of the sheer satisfaction of a job well done. ‘Lure’ has a sense of intensity and almost urges me along, leaving me hanging in anticipation.<br /> <br />Sandra- The pace of this is remarkable, almost whooshing me to the conclusion. Well written.<br /><br />Aidan – This is quite creepy, even though I love clowns, but you still manage to inject the hatred and prejudice that undermines humanity, to staggering effect.<br /><br />Rebecca- ‘Tamability’ – Very haunting, helped by the lovely sentence rhythms and near poetic stride. ‘Mona Lisa’ is bursting with lush narrative; the imagery you conjure is amazing.<br /><br />Melenka – ‘Transition’ is a very visual piece and there is enough here to arouse the senses with some lovely description. ‘Crashing the Party’ is oh so dark and ‘corruption is oft times more satisfying a meal than death’ is a corker of a line.<br /><br />Ragemore – Bleakness and inevitability nicely captured and a fascinating take on characters too.<br /><br />Chris – ‘One More Time…’ I liked the line ‘the sky is falling’. I saw in that line a profound sorrow…or maybe that’s just me. ‘Tech Support’ is quite brilliant, loved the play on words.<br /><br />William – Wow, Darla is evil personified. Stuff of nightmares, that it is just a game to her. But this is pure black humour coasting through this.<br /><br />Antonia – This is an amazing piece, sad and poignant and carefully crafted, and a fantastic line to end.<br /><br />Asuqi – ‘Winter Hunt’ The descriptive quality of the language in this story is adorable. ‘Obtainable’ is full with nuance, loved ‘slitted eyes and wagging tail’ to describe the male.<br /><br />Tony – Firstly, I just love the title, but this story achieves descriptive fluidity in both the literal terms, a perfectly pitched dark underscore to the narrative. An amazing piece.<br /><br />John - I like the way you open and close with the change of colour; the symbolic nature of the story summed up in two very astute sentences and enclosing a particularly sad story.<br /><br />Steve – Such a strong piece delivers a smack to the senses, love the build up to the crescendo.AllWriteFictionAdvicehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03381125356850555606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-79313890982351541682011-03-23T10:01:08.065+00:002011-03-23T10:01:08.065+00:00William- Sinister tricks that made me smile though...William- Sinister tricks that made me smile though I knew I shouldn’t really. The two-fer on Darla’s deaths was a nifty bonus. I love this kind of darkness and death without reason. Just for the kicks, as the kids sometimes say.<br /><br />Antnonia- I wasn’t sure if the fox at the end represented the loss of the beauty he had failed to see or the cruel indifference of nature. Either way, or both, it struck hard. To show the last moment with a sight that makes him question his actions is breath taking. <br /><br />Asqui- Two tales of hunger of different sorts. I saw the calling out to lost needs in both and the need to satisfy that emptiness. ‘Winter Hunt’ was my favourite. It was lyrical and sparse yet somehow said so much of the turmoil that rages inside.<br /><br />John- The last line was striking- ‘Her tears turn white’, could have been a flag of surrender in her sadness, but the bookending of the shifting monochrome of tears showed us a different tale. The transition made us aware that not everything is black and white. The grey areas are where we choose out position. Clever stuff.<br /><br />Steve- Each line seemed to tell its own tale, an unfolding of years without letting obsession fall. The last line blended the cold screams of life into the piercing sparks on hot steel with ease. This was like a mini movie.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04760596809720075421noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-41518477787092556482011-03-23T02:13:25.358+00:002011-03-23T02:13:25.358+00:00I have to have some cheap fun:
Tech Support
In t...I have to have some cheap fun:<br /><br /><b>Tech Support</b><br /><br />In the middle of my apology, Hotmail ran cold.<br /><br />I tried again; and Chrome lost its lustre.<br /><br />On my next attempt, Firefox ran off with my words.<br /><br />The Explorer wouldn't let me Yahoo.<br /><br />Facebook got all up in my grill.<br /><br />And my tweets were stilled<br />As Firefox came back for dessert.<br /><br />I surrendered, and threw my laptop out the window.<br /><br />How was I to know you were coming over to make up?<br /><br />Um..<br /><br />When you get out of the hospital...text me, 'kay?Chris Alliniottehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04094925215735680849noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-2317539190807324292011-03-23T02:08:55.598+00:002011-03-23T02:08:55.598+00:00AJ - Simple, heavy brilliance as always. You twist...AJ - Simple, heavy brilliance as always. You twisted my expectations of the "sacrifice". Great Job.<br /><br />William - Wicked. Wicked Darla. I want to know how Grandma liked being a fox... for that one minute.<br /><br />Antonia - At the very least, he had a witness to what he must have felt was his ultimate moment. Strong writing. Sad end.<br /><br />asuqi - #1 - beautiful words in this tragedy, the ambiguity makes it mysterious. #2 - I like the strangely tender end to this tale of entitlement.<br /><br />Lily - Gorgeous writing, and a brick wall of an ending. I'm breathless.<br /><br />Anthony - Such awesome word choices. So evocative. My skin was writhing.<br /><br />Rebecca - I'm going to be dreaming of "icicle wings". These words have flavour.<br /><br />John - the story of heartbreak by the purest heart of them all. Excellent writing.<br /><br />Steve - Holy shit. The train hit me. This story was deadly good.<br /><br />Melenka - love the dance of darkness woven in among the literal dancing.Chris Alliniottehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04094925215735680849noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-13048207642304723582011-03-23T01:38:12.974+00:002011-03-23T01:38:12.974+00:00What an amazing week this has turned out to be!
R...What an amazing week this has turned out to be!<br /><br /><b>Ragemore</b> - I couldn't help but think of the invaders as resetting the program to see what would develop next, and the secret savior messing about with their experiment.<br /><br /><b>Chris</b> - I adore this vignette. It's so jaded and yet with a sheen of hope to it. And poor, tired, Atlas. The least he deserves is a little pleasure for all his hard work.<br /><br /><b>AJ</b> - Such amazing detail in so few words. We all know it, but we forget until reminded. You do so powerfully.<br /><br /><b>William</b> - Darla is a piece of work! I love the use of "hand magic" and the driver dropping, too. Wickedly entertaining.<br /><br /><b>Antonia</b> - This is such a sad piece, and spot-on with the detachment and sense of hopelessness.<br /><br /><b>asuqi</b> - Winter Hunt was poignant, beautiful, and amazingly visual. I love this line: <i>You didn´t come to dinner, but at least you came home.</i><br /><br />Obtainable has such great voice! I want to go to that bar and watch the fox-man work.<br /><br /><b>Lily</b> - Lure is a nightmare piece, no doubt. I want the before and after, even though I'm afraid to go there.<br /><br /><b>Anthony</b> - Your piece is soaked with sensual detail and dreadful destruction. This could be a poem and it would be just as strong and strange.<br /><br /><b>Rebecca</b> - I think I know this woman, or more than one of her, and the portrait you paint is brilliant.<br /><br /><b>John</b> - Great imagery and emotion. I love that her choice made their gamble moot.<br /><br /><b>Steve</b> - Therein lies every parent's nightmare, though it takes different shape depending on the dangers of home. The whole piece feels like a moving train.Melenkahttp://pushcomestoshove.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-13978046814641443182011-03-23T00:56:10.656+00:002011-03-23T00:56:10.656+00:00I cannot help myself. The thing behind the door f...I cannot help myself. The thing behind the door from last week wanted out.<br /><br /><b>Crashing the Party</b><br /><br />No one does the foxtrot, much less waltzes. They thrash about, oblivious to their partners. I pass through the middle of the square unnoticed. Bathed and outfitted (as a man this time), I search for sustenance.<br /> <br />On the edge – of the group, of a ledge, all the same to her – the ripe young woman with falsely dark hair surrenders hope of belonging.<br /> <br />I tender the sort of smile she never expected from someone wearing this skin. <br /><br />She tells me she is Grace, and so she will be while we play. <br /><br />Corruption is oft times more satisfying a meal than death.Melenkahttp://pushcomestoshove.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-21301888268708156772011-03-22T20:51:18.108+00:002011-03-22T20:51:18.108+00:00John-- I love this, but this line: She is the hear...<b>John</b>-- I love this, but this line: <i>She is the heartbreak that is the last thing two ex-lovers share. </i> absolutely slayed me. Isn't that the truth, the last thing... And that's what we're supposed to be doing, I think: telling the truth (via our lies).<br /><br /><b>Steve</b>-- WOW. Unexpected, hard-hitting, a "did you see that?" and read-again-immediately read.R.S. Bohnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09101260459422806220noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-61089888878079807332011-03-22T20:46:53.795+00:002011-03-22T20:46:53.795+00:00To answer a couple of questions:
Chris - Gravity ...To answer a couple of questions:<br /><br /><b>Chris</b> - Gravity Part I and a slightly longer version of Gravity II have been accepted for Pill Hill Press's Daily Flash 2012, but I am working on a part III and a longer story.<br /><br /><b>Lily</b> - I'm thinking Sam Rockwell.Ellie Garratthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03731071128348213067noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-2484303992587750812011-03-22T20:41:56.880+00:002011-03-22T20:41:56.880+00:00Jenny Dreadful - 'Your mouth a sad doorway han...<b>Jenny Dreadful</b> - 'Your mouth a sad doorway hanging ajar'. What an opener! Stunning piece.<br /><br /><b>Mimi</b> - One should always have another option. Loved it.<br /><br /><b>Susan</b> - Welcome back. You told a whole story in poetry; I've got to admire that!<br /><br /><b>Lily</b> - Powerful imagery and great twist at the end. Brilliant as always.<br /><br /><b>Sandra</b> - I did not see that ending coming! But will she escape?<br /><br /><b>Aidan</b> - Oh, my. That made me come out in goosebumps. Loved the twisted nature of the piece.<br /><br /><b>Rebecca</b> - a piece that makes us think about some of the damage human beings do. Stunning imagery as well.<br /><br /><b>Melenka</b> - I have to say just one word, wow. This deserves to made into something much longer.<br /><br /><b>Ragemore</b> - I love sci-fi and really enjoyed your piece. I want to read more of yours.<br /><br /><b>Chris</b> - I adore stories told through dialogue and yours just sang to me. Stunning.<br /><br /><b>AJ</b> - This reminded me of Wilfred Owen whose poetry I will never forget. Powerful and emotional sutff.<br /><br /><b>William</b> - How wicked are you? I adored your piece and it will certainly stay with me for quite a while.<br /><br /><b>Antonia</b> - Such a sad piece but yet so true. In our despair we fail to see the beauty around us. Beautiful piece of writing.<br /><br /><b>asuqi</b> - I loved them both. Winter Hunt was perfectly written and I could see the fox as if it were almost at my backdoor. Obtainable but not really obtainable - a clever tale<br /><br /><b>Lily</b> - I could feel the fear rising with every word. You should make this one into a longer piece!<br /><br /><b>Anthony</b> - She’ll swirl in babies bottles. Oh, my. This was one twisted and horrific piece, and I loved it.<br /><br /><b>Rebecca</b> - Shivers. Down. My. Spine. I adore your fiction.<br /><br /><b>John</b> - Such powerful imagery and a great piece of writing. I loved that she did not surrender and that placing bets was irrelevant in the end.<br /><br /><b>Steve</b> - Oh, my. Not the ending I was expecting. You smacked it to her at the end. A clever piece of writing!Ellie Garratthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03731071128348213067noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-38362728637443959042011-03-22T18:19:50.207+00:002011-03-22T18:19:50.207+00:00Crossing
“Railroad car, grandpa, railroad car!”
...<b>Crossing</b><br /><br />“Railroad car, grandpa, railroad car!”<br /><br />Sally Fox, graduate of Ms. Wilmer’s first grade Vernon Elementary class learned to <i>love</i> ash-spewing trains: desire is never preset.<br /><br />Preset as a chugging engine tracked to the high-plains - trees, shrubs, streams and observance all pass as 70MPH dreams surrendering to horizons.<br /><br />A graduate, Sally’s determined against surrender. Flower prints sway perfectly as the tiny pale legs of her frame push energetically, bursting from grandpa’s grasp.<br /><br />Standing on the track’s middle with pomp she stares wildly - squealing breaks barrel down and the screaming steam overtakes her.Steve Cormierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05120779942422080150noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-49743342908930561772011-03-22T17:52:23.209+00:002011-03-22T17:52:23.209+00:00Lily, more 'enchanting' imagery which you ...Lily, more 'enchanting' imagery which you do so well.<br />Anthony, what CAN I say? too nasty for words.<br />Rebecca, oh good one ! (again)<br />John, what a wonderful last line to an evocative piece of writing.<br />You guys are too good for me.Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12594229396805493611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-19732849996727453402011-03-22T09:23:33.449+00:002011-03-22T09:23:33.449+00:00Anthony - that is just... bleurgh... I need to go ...Anthony - that is just... bleurgh... I need to go disinfect my eyes, then never drink anything straight from the tap again, ever.<br /><br />Rebecca - a barrage of sexuality, and a great close.John Xerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17492709629314280633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-25562469132966152302011-03-22T08:52:09.106+00:002011-03-22T08:52:09.106+00:00Madame Fox
Madame Fox cries tears of black.
She ...<b>Madame Fox</b><br /><br />Madame Fox cries tears of black.<br /><br />She is the heartbreak that is the last thing two ex-lovers share. She is the dead rose, caught in the middle.<br /><br />She could surrender to this and be torn apart – a conjoined heart still beating as it is ripped asunder, geysering lifeblood in faltering plumes – or she can change, shift and escape: grow fleet, grow feral.<br /><br />They call her name, making bets on who she will come to, but she is wild now, and besides, they are calling her old name, her human name.<br /><br />Her tears turn white.John Xerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17492709629314280633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-55387818964645277912011-03-22T04:58:49.300+00:002011-03-22T04:58:49.300+00:00Rebecca: Tamability, those silver foxes are everyw...<strong>Rebecca</strong>: <i>Tamability</i>, those silver foxes are everywhere; I think I now know what domestication gets you. I like the fresh fox viewpoint. <i>Mona Lisa</i>, some great images in this piece (my favorite icicle wings). I don't think I have words for the dark horror this brings out<br /><br /><strong>Melenka</strong>: nice counterpoint to Tamability. Did you intentionally play on Kitsune, your piece strongly reminds me of that mythos.<br /><br /><strong>Ragemore</strong>: I love the SF aspects of this piece and the full story you squeezed into your hundred words. The final paragraph has a nice punch.<br /><br /><strong>Chris</strong>: gorgeous line, <i>full of chickens with money</i>. Playfully clever, I like the sky is falling with chickens and then you play one more level with Atlas.<br /><br /><strong>AJ</strong>: Sacrifice's hook <i>heartbeat unfolded like a flower</i> took my breath away. Loved the imagery here and I want more.<br /><br /><strong>William</strong>: brilliant, I totally got sucked into Darla's twisted games; her light heartedness and the callousness she shows when they die.<br /><br /><strong>Antonia</strong>: a sad tale, but it is so easy to believe the lies that hide the burgeoning of life. You capture this viewpoint well.<br /><br /><strong>Asuqi</strong>: <i>Hunt</i>, the winter birches catches the sadness of this tale; <i>Obtainable</i>, lovely images in this one and a sense of unrequited desire gives it a sad tinge.<br /><br /><strong>Lily</strong>: <i>Lure</i>, <i>did you go at all</i> nice tweak on the ending bringing doubt into the story. Enjoyed the pacing which made me think of running with short pauses for gasps.<br /><br /><strong>Anthony</strong>: images dripping with the horror of the story, really liked the exploding berries. The line drinking of the crime ups the horror for me.<br /><br />Anthony, I hadn't thought of the 'BANG' flag, but now I can't get that image out of my head. Love it.AidanFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09876041003278004627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-90264238515708272852011-03-21T20:44:07.695+00:002011-03-21T20:44:07.695+00:00Lily – forever stuck in a feverish nightmare. Haun...Lily – forever stuck in a feverish nightmare. Haunting and beautiful!<br /><br />Anthony – relentless poetry? I think yes. Perfect title. This: ”Soon children will drink my crime. She’ll swirl in babies bottles. Every pair of lips will taste my confession.” Great!<br /><br />Becky – Love it, love it, love it! Wonderfully absurd! ”I grow icicle wings!” Wow! Great imagery! (I love magnetic poetry boards, they´re brain-tickling stuff. Like being drunk without having to actually drink)asuqihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05478950013985706858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-51653396961123734192011-03-21T18:36:19.131+00:002011-03-21T18:36:19.131+00:00Melenka- Transitions and metamorphosis is always r...Melenka- Transitions and metamorphosis is always ripe in the mythologies though I’ve never heard of one with foxes. Great idea that I’m sure has more legs than 100 words.<br /><br />Ragemore- Great first entry. Loneliness in annihilation and a sadness of watching everything disappear in the silent communication. A bleak tale that had thinning strands of hope inside nature.<br /><br />Chris- At first I was thinking of hen houses, then Chicken Little’s fabled sky falling in jumped out at me. But all along, or intertwined, was the relief needed to lift that weight from the shoulders of Atlas. Layered and thick with meaning. Quite cheeky too.<br /><br />AJ- A beautifully painted scene of dread. The details unfolded like a complex envelope of terror and darkened beauty before our eyes, before laying us flat amongst the dead and the dirt. Chillingly real and stunningly told.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04760596809720075421noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-48672157728006219072011-03-21T14:36:34.571+00:002011-03-21T14:36:34.571+00:00Lily,‘Her Grace’- I actually whooped at that. The ...Lily,‘Her Grace’- I actually whooped at that. The anger I used to feel watching pictures of those savages would hang with me for days. Thankfully we became enlightened enough to stop the majority of it. But how I wish it would have ended with this graceful revenge.<br /><br />Sandra- What a shocker came from an early promise of humour and romance. Great turn and a powerfully quick ending.<br /><br />Aidan- Ha brilliantly comically perverse. Where did that idea come from? No I’M replacing that question mark with one of these..! I had a picture of the gun splattering the pallbearer’s brains with a little ‘BANG!’ flag hanging from the barrel.<br /><br />Rebecca- This piece saddened me. It only proves no matter what horrors we dream up to amuse ourselves with in fiction, reality is always one step ahead of us. Very haunting story that I’m sure will remain with me and others long after reading.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04760596809720075421noreply@blogger.com