tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post4196532600758361518..comments2023-12-31T16:30:56.708+00:00Comments on Lily Childs' Feardom: Lily's Friday PredictionLily Childshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15861288507716873813noreply@blogger.comBlogger55125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-36253314096754522232011-02-17T21:20:16.120+00:002011-02-17T21:20:16.120+00:00That's okay Lily, I've got half term! :)
...That's okay Lily, I've got half term! :)<br /><br />And yeah....kinda left it on the edge...<br /><br />:)Katherine Moriartyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16906656050961262255noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-83957215022731776982011-02-17T21:03:13.005+00:002011-02-17T21:03:13.005+00:00One minute to go - blimey Pix! Big challenge next ...One minute to go - blimey Pix! Big challenge next week, you get one day less.<br /><br />The fairy army makes its return, takes its revenge. Lovely last line.<br />******************************<br />No more entries please. Thanks.Lily Childshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15861288507716873813noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-59575292816417225732011-02-17T20:59:27.743+00:002011-02-17T20:59:27.743+00:00Pushing for time, I know....eeeek!
ADIEU
Ner...Pushing for time, I know....eeeek!<br /><br /><b> <i> ADIEU </i> </b><br /><br />Nerves flutter around my veins, hidden within the shadows, poised. <br /><br />I smiled as I watched you, the darkness soothing me.<br /><br />I see your figure, a shape against the wall. You snore loudly, it makes me chuckle.<br /><br />I raise my bow and arrow; a tiny prick is all you’ll feel.<br /><br />Silence fills my ears, yet a distant ringing can be heard.<br /><br />My army of fairies are out there, waiting to drag your body.<br /><br />My fingers hold the bow, tension begging to be released; arrow dripped in a sedative.<br /><br />You humans stole our friend.<br /><br />I’m stealing your life.<br /><br />Adieu bâtard...Katherine Moriartyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16906656050961262255noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-5379156468915804752011-02-17T20:30:37.101+00:002011-02-17T20:30:37.101+00:00Poodle Kim? Ah, sorry - that was me. Got the soft-...Poodle Kim? Ah, sorry - that was me. Got the soft-rock hair thing going on for a <em>80s crap-music party</em> later. Promise I'll come back as Snow White at midnight. <br /><br />Nice write - made me chuckle.Lily Childshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15861288507716873813noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-91469205953969522782011-02-17T20:22:13.466+00:002011-02-17T20:22:13.466+00:00Ok - stuffed m'self with spag bol, and rushed ...Ok - stuffed m'self with spag bol, and rushed out a hundred words ...<br /><br />Appearances can be deceiving <br /><br />Those shape-shifters have got a nerve! I spend the whole day getting ready for full moon, you know, shower, shampoo, brush me fangs and polish claws, and they just turn up and, well, shift.<br />They’ve got no finesse, you know. They just stand there and become whatever they like. But it’s not real, oh no. It’s all done with magic. A quick snap of the fingers, or paws, and they’ve changed into something else.<br />You know what they say, Jack of all trades … and all that. The last one was more of a poodle in drag than a werewolf.scratchypen (Kim)http://scratchypen.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-66680895382813287362011-02-17T03:28:16.912+00:002011-02-17T03:28:16.912+00:00David - (1) Great story. Full of emotion, and an a...David - (1) Great story. Full of emotion, and an aptly twisted ending! (2) Holy crap, sir. Shape of an angel is stunning. You just let the top off the inkwell this week, huh? Great work all around.<br /><br />AJ - there's something delightfully enigmatic going on here, and I love the noir-ish touch of the neon lights.<br /><br />Sue H - I bet Don Johnson never had days like that. Great sense of humour, and told in a really fun voice.<br /><br />Aidan - Admit it, you've got a half dozen novels in the works, and you're dribbling out little excerpts for us here. There has to be more to all these stories - there just has to be, because I need to read more of this. "...an allusion of horns and ember eyes" - love that image.<br /><br />Ravenways - this really evokes a scene in so very few words, and there is an ambiguity that makes us want to read more!<br /><br />Melenka - nice, fresh approach to the feeders of the night! Even they have a bad day sometimes...<br /><br />Antonia - gruesome imagery, and a pissed-off shapeshifter - what's not to like?<br /><br />Lily - I love this imagery, " the deepest night sky hung ebony blue from his arms". Word painting at its best<br /><br />Susan May - dark humour abounds this week, and in daylight yet! Nice work<br /><br />William - you've got yourself a great character here - "bathing himself in something more than the glory of Uriel." Nicely gross detail, that.Chris Alliniottehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04094925215735680849noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-82612849113971336072011-02-16T22:45:25.178+00:002011-02-16T22:45:25.178+00:00Dear Mr Davoll, methinks Me Kook is going all the ...Dear Mr Davoll, methinks Me Kook is going all the way! There is so much to him - here is a tiny vignette, a glimpse into the madness of his existence. Seriously - this is a full-time character.Lily Childshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15861288507716873813noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-1551195906395127702011-02-16T22:34:28.798+00:002011-02-16T22:34:28.798+00:00Susan, those cumbersome buggers are a right pain! ...Susan, those cumbersome buggers are a right pain! Loved this! Very visual. And 'brazen' - I'm sure everyone will be shocked at - is one of my favourite words (along with flesh, bawdy, slattern and the French 'libellule'.) <br /><br />Lovely.Lily Childshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15861288507716873813noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-86995529929130823642011-02-16T22:33:34.000+00:002011-02-16T22:33:34.000+00:00Apologies, Kook won't rest at the moment.
Rev...Apologies, Kook won't rest at the moment.<br /><br /><b>Revelation</b><br /><br />As Alan lay in the half-light upon his bed the shadows began to move and take on a familiar shape, in fear he tried to drag the sheets over himself like a shield. Like a child, believing his bedclothes would protect him from the might of his celestial visitor.<br /><br />“Oh Master!” He cried. As his nerve gave in so did his sphincter, bathing himself in something more than the glory of Uriel. <br /><br />As the visions began to fade, he drifted into a fitful medicated dream, where his next victim would come to him, and beg for tender deliverance from sin.William Davollhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09705387237656647744noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-70370358036886333782011-02-16T21:45:56.723+00:002011-02-16T21:45:56.723+00:00Susan - That was great. There are so many unanswe...Susan - That was great. There are so many unanswered questions here. I have scenarios going round in my head. Did she? Was she? I'll make my own mind up. Well done!David Barberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05006533626998905560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-23755021578577393792011-02-16T20:43:09.781+00:002011-02-16T20:43:09.781+00:00Susan, I love this - a true killer last line!Susan, I love this - a true killer last line!Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12594229396805493611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-81845293213066164292011-02-16T20:41:41.305+00:002011-02-16T20:41:41.305+00:00David - Excellent, fantastic offerings! All excell...David - Excellent, fantastic offerings! All excellent and well written, good stuff.<br /><br />Ellie - another super offering. Looking forward to your third week! Well done.<br /><br />Mimi - Aaw! I say the old git is going to miss the running commentary and it'll serve him right when he tires of talking to himself!<br /><br />Lily - Fantastic poetry here! I love 'paid with pox and with shilling she justifies the killing' What a line! And I agree, you should win and give yourself a good slurp of wine.<br /><br />Rebecca - 'antlers and men shaped like things that hunt' - that's quite a dream! I really liked the pace and flow here, well done.<br /><br />Chris - Ugh! I'm itching now. Freaky!<br /><br />AJ - Fabulous! I want to quote each line as my favourite bit but truth is I love all of it. Excellent stuff.<br /><br />Sue - Well done! I enjoyed this, left me wanting more. Great twist, I wasn't expecting the 'in drag' bit.<br /><br />Aidan - ooh. 'A demon flickers, an allusion of horns and ember eyes...' What an image this conjures up! Utterly fantastic, well done.<br /><br />Ravenways - Excellent! Well-written, I especially loved the opening line.<br /><br />Melenka - Chilling! I went back and re-read this. Mulling it over. I can only echo what Lily's already said, sublime.<br /><br />Antonia - Wow! Incredibly vivid. What an image. I'm disturbed, awesome!<br /><br />Hope I haven't missed anyone. <br />:0)Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18014683585191165226noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-34933929697302105022011-02-16T19:53:19.435+00:002011-02-16T19:53:19.435+00:00Hello! Another terrific batch of writings again t...Hello! Another terrific batch of writings again this week. Lovely.<br /><br />My offering.<br /><br /><br />Brazen<br /><br /> With brazen nerve she bent down and grasped the unmoving shape. Her only option was to drag it across the park in broad daylight.<br /> Passersby turned to gawk.<br /> “It’s alright,” she called gaily with a shrug of her shoulders. “Too much wine,” she giggled for good measure.<br /> The staring couple nodded and turned away, snickering.<br /> The smile dropped off her face as she continued heaving. Stupid cumbersome bugger, she thought.<br /> She had to get him back to the car before the blood seeped through.Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18014683585191165226noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-62884497304113227382011-02-15T10:39:10.314+00:002011-02-15T10:39:10.314+00:00Lily, Stella Song resonates, it's the only wor...Lily, Stella Song resonates, it's the only word for it. <br />David, no words other than simply incredible and sad.<br />Everyone, thanks for giving all of us an absolute feast of gory beautiful heartwrenching 'stay with you' words.Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12594229396805493611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-10322954384318512542011-02-14T16:47:59.818+00:002011-02-14T16:47:59.818+00:00Antonia - I love a good shape-shift, it comes in v...Antonia - I love a good shape-shift, it comes in very handy. Brilliant opening - and closing lines. Really enjoyed this.<br /><br />David, I read <em>The Shape of an Angel</em> just I was leaving the house yesterday and this is the first chance I've had to comment. I've been thinking about it ever since because it broke my heart. I was really taken by surprise that it was the father who had died - I thought it was another child or one of his parents. Beautifully crafted and so sad.Lily Childshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15861288507716873813noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-32652386083064940712011-02-14T13:49:20.346+00:002011-02-14T13:49:20.346+00:00Rebecca - beautiful and dreamlike, like poetic pro...Rebecca - beautiful and dreamlike, like poetic prose. Who will visit her? I wonder.<br /><br />Chris - a terrifying tale, which had me squeamish in all the right places. I won't look at my elbow in the same way!<br /><br />David - at first I thought it was a child caring for their father and then the wife. But you still managed the surprise ending with the gender re-assignment! Genius.<br /><br />AJ - a murderous tale, indeed. I loved it.<br /><br />Sue - another piece that managed to surprise me; I never guess at the ending.<br /><br />Aidan - I really enjoyed Half Breeds; it could be turned into something much longer.<br /><br />ravenways - yay for Melenka's suggestion. I dark piece of writing that had me wanting more.<br /><br />Melenka - loved it. Great imagery and I'm fascinated by the characters you've introduced.<br /><br />Antonia - shapeshifters! Genius idea. I loved the characters voice and intrigued as to how the man asked for it.<br /><br />Lily - stunning imagery, especially 'he wound her galactic hair'.<br /><br />David - so full of emotion. Beautiful.Ellie Garratthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03731071128348213067noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-20619306115644991432011-02-13T13:52:26.206+00:002011-02-13T13:52:26.206+00:00Lily - That was beautiful. So much imagery in so ...Lily - That was beautiful. So much imagery in so few words. <br /><br />"...He wound her galactic hair around strong fingers, dragging her face towards his waiting mouth, and kissed her until winter..."<br /><br />I knew you had a soft, slushy side!! :-)David Barberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00231973272530266336noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-25129187895524846632011-02-13T12:50:50.938+00:002011-02-13T12:50:50.938+00:00The Shape Of An Angel
Every nerve in my body scre...<strong>The Shape Of An Angel</strong><br /><br />Every nerve in my body screamed. <br /><br />They had told me it would be painful but the pain had now gone, apart from that which filled my heart.<br /><br />I watched as the priest gave the eulogy.<br /><br />“...you leave, in the shape of an angel...”<br /><br />Tears streamed down the face of my wife, my daughter held tight to her chest, unaware of what was happening.<br /><br />I reached out to touch their beautiful faces. They needed me; they needed a strong, reassuring arm around them.<br /><br />Then it happened. I felt the drag towards the bright light that appeared above my coffin.<br /><br />Good bye!<br /><br /><strong>~End~</strong>David Barberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00231973272530266336noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-72961867049774852602011-02-13T12:28:35.188+00:002011-02-13T12:28:35.188+00:00I'll be back this evening to add more comments...I'll be back this evening to add more comments. In the meantime, here's another one:<br /><br /><br /><strong>Stellar Song</strong><br /><br />All that she was, was his. Her shape – moulded from the deepest night sky hung ebony blue from his arms. He wound her galactic hair around strong fingers, dragging her face towards his waiting mouth, and kissed her until winter.<br /><br />Beneath the molten glow of his skin, veins and nerves surged to make mountain ranges. He cried out loud, capping the peaks with snow. When he dared to look, her smiling countenance stared up – not at him – but into the celestial womb beyond.<br /><br />With a silver tear he released her. Not even the Gods can control the stars.Lily Childshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15861288507716873813noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-35893247342336757532011-02-13T11:36:08.880+00:002011-02-13T11:36:08.880+00:00anyone would think I was anti-men, wouldn't th...anyone would think I was anti-men, wouldn't they? I think what I'm doing is writing out frustration with the males of the species. Like:<br />(me) have you printed the DVD covers I needed?<br />(partner) Yes. I'll go cut them to size for you.<br />(me) Thanks.<br />(Partner) Here's your DVD covers.<br />(me) Brilliant. (insert said covers into DVD boxes.) Going to the house now with the DVDs.<br />(partner) What DVDs?<br />(we work in a summerhouse in the garden, we spend all day trekking back and forth. I cannot count how many times he has arrived with a coffee, and not one for me...)Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12594229396805493611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-15686455634810279272011-02-13T11:23:34.494+00:002011-02-13T11:23:34.494+00:00Antonia - Shape-shifters! That was excellent. An...Antonia - Shape-shifters! That was excellent. Another bloke bites the dust. Hmmmm!! :-)<br /><br />Hope you're feeling better soon!David Barberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00231973272530266336noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-89909993337265529322011-02-13T11:15:10.918+00:002011-02-13T11:15:10.918+00:00Sue - That was great. You had me thinking it was ...Sue - That was great. You had me thinking it was a woman being put on the street by her pimp and then that ending was superb. I remember dressing as a woman once and......I've said too much!! :-)<br /><br />Aiden - Loved Half Breeds. I want to more of them when Ashton admits he's one of them. Great job!<br /><br />Ravenways - I'm glad you took Melenka's advice. A smart debut. Dark and intriguing. Well done! <br /><br />Melenka - Love this piece. Great imagery!David Barberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00231973272530266336noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-43075470828190967072011-02-13T11:10:10.036+00:002011-02-13T11:10:10.036+00:00Lily said: whatcha gonna do about it?
Well, this ....Lily said: whatcha gonna do about it?<br />Well, this ...<br />Mistaken Identity<br /><br />The eye opened slowly, revealing a blood filled cavity. If there was a nerve left whole, the mouth would be making the shape of a scream. Instead there was silence.<br /> Blood is such a drag, is it not? Clings, stains, mars everything it touches, but every human is full of the stuff. It leaks when they’re cut.<br /> Oh but he asked for this. He begged for it – not that he knew it – when he took me and held me that way. Poor deluded man. He had no idea; do they ever? what a shape-shifter can do. And did.Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12594229396805493611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-1510322321522362202011-02-13T10:27:36.474+00:002011-02-13T10:27:36.474+00:00Welcome to The Feardom, Ravenways! Wow - Don't...Welcome to The Feardom, <strong>Ravenways</strong>! Wow - <em>Don't Look Now</em> is an excellent write, hard-hitting and cruel. " Like hitting an exposed nerve with tin foil" is one of the most sensation-evoking lines I've read in a long time; it genuinely made me wince. Very well done.<br /><br /><strong>Melenka</strong>, I am just loving <em>Stock in Trade</em>. From the play on words in the title to the extraordinary scenario. The wrapping of shadows, draining the flavours out of the erotic encounter is sublime.Lily Childshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15861288507716873813noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7536979460489400599.post-17361013459577008422011-02-13T09:47:51.359+00:002011-02-13T09:47:51.359+00:00and even more wonderful stuff to read!
David, clev...and even more wonderful stuff to read!<br />David, clever twist here.<br />AJ, turn that into another full length story immediately! but keep that killer last line!<br />Sue, you stole my idea, well, the drag bit anyway, and did it better than I was going to! Back to the drawing board for me...<br />Aidan, what can anyone say about Half Breeds? Stunning<br />Ravenways, good to see you here with a lovely involved piece, a lot being said in so few words.<br />Melenka, setting up mysteries, who why and how and so it winds into the brain and you keep thinking about it - the way all good pieces should be. <br />Still gotta work on mine. Been involved in a long (for me) story about Halloween. Got to be finished, driving me mad!Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12594229396805493611noreply@blogger.com